Scared of the facts

Chapter One -He. Rain and hail storm relentlessly outside of the house, thundering down hard on the windows until they shake. The sound and light surround him, and blacking out ...

haha it just did get better actually (: so sorry to anyone I've given harsh reviews too! okay I'll change that! thanks again :L x

Ill put my comments next to your version, because it's not letting me quote today (: very good btw The night was cold. Goose-bumps rose along my bare arms like ...

I know you're not trying to offend here, but that really is no exaggeration. It was set to a word limit too, that's why I didn't elaborate. But I might ...

Thankyou Emma! I just edited it how you suggested too, and it does sound better now! yes my brother was 14 weeks prem. :/ but he's 3 now and doing ...

put the fourth chapter on silly xx

everyone was way to harsh cause that was a pretty damn good read (: envious of you ella xx

aww that sounds really harsh. you should tell him you love him! yeah the worse part is, the girl he 'loves' is my best friend. But i got over it ...

loved it. great follow on from part one (: - beth x

If that means what I think it means, then you're wrong :P these weren't based on me lol, and btw, try answering your hone once in a while and go ...

I just read the first sentence and janet payne is my grandmothers maiden name. ill write a proper review in a minute! ... continued! That was incredible, I'll forgive you ...

I just read the first sentence and janet payne is my grandmothers maiden name. ill write a proper review in a minute!

I can't work out how to move into into the poetry section...

Thanks so much for all the helpful guys (: the thing, 'forever Thenody', you say "Telling us to forget what has flown too soon" . The thing is when I ...

Loved everything. It was so beautifully written, It had our attention from the beginning to the end, and omg I want to read more! pm me if you put more ...